Dark Star

was a good atempt but a miserable fail. you deffinatly NEED PUCTUATION!!!! i found it a little confusing and i desperate need of said above...you have so much inside you're ...

short and sweet, but lack of interest. it isnt very spasifac and doesnt hold any emotion is the words. "Nobler and nobler, my dearest friend, be true to yourself as ...

the poem is good but lacks some vital "things". first off, im not feeling all that much emotion. the words are there but their meaning is empty. the poem lacks ...

well over all the poem was good. deffinatly need some reworking though and the rhyming is a bit "amature". the first three stanzas were good but then things got a ...

the poem was pretty good. i found it a little "conventional" but at the same time powerful and full of emotion. i agree about the last stanza... i dont know ...

loved it!!! just amazing and so...POWERFUL!! the words flow and just all together they create an instant peice of art! the writting and words are so intense and just get ...

great poem. nice, easy but powerful and full of imagery. one can feel different emotions while reading this peice. its light reading for the light hearted and free spirited. it ...

its a good start. as said above it could be more developed. but for what you have right now it is very good. it flows pretty well and gives strong ...

AWESOME!!! i loved it!! this was a really great peice of work. the emottion and feeling that one gets from reading it was amazing. some ppl may not appriciate a ...

i really enjoyed your poem a tone..you could have added a bit more intensity and agression. as Snoink was saying, you backed off a little but its all gud...awesome wording ...

very interesting...i really enjoyed it. it was fresh, different and unique. it gave a feeling of mystery and confusion but at the same time a feeling of perpose and knowing ...

i really enjoyed your poem. you really gave a solid feeling of constant question and doubt that we all feel at some point in our lives, "are we living it ...

wow...i must say..that was very powerful and full of emotion. i coud really feel your anger and hurt FOR your friend. a peice of advice, being less direct and more ...